Day 1: (All assignments in this class are taken from:)
Rosenwater, David and Jill Stephen. Writing Analytically.
          Fourth Edition. Boston: Thomson and Wadsworth, 2006.

Introductions:
There are no right and wrong answers; there are only well argued and poorly defended positions. In this class you will not learn how to be right, but you will instead learn how to argue your position clearly and forcefully. This means you will learn conviction.

Discussion of syllabus and Vocab. Notebook announcement.
For this class I want you to keep a vocabulary notebook. Each week you will add five new terms. Come up with a different word for each day of the week. Use your new word at least twice on the day you select it. You should choose words from the class readings, but you can choose words you pick up somewhere else. At the end of the each week we will compile a list of your favorite word from the week.

In your notebooks you should:

  • List the word.
  • Say what part of speech it is.
  • Say whether it is evaluative or descriptive.
  • Say why you think so.

  • Evaluative vs. Descriptive Words (judgmental vs. non-judgmental words)
    Say one word that describes you. Write it down and bring these to class with you on Tuesday.
    Today we are going to differentiate between judgmental and non-judgmental words and concrete and abstract terms. Judgmental terms offer judgments and are generally not very descriptive (good, bad, ugly, boring, depressing, exciting). Judgmental adjectives and adverbs are usually only about the impact the subject had on the reader; they tell us how the reader responded.

    Non-judgmental description is usually much more concrete (for example, describing something as green, or tall, or side-by-side, or generally about specific physical characteristics or mannerisms. Such description usually shows how the subject affects the senses.

    Abstract terms, on the other hand, usually describe an idea (causality, virility, ideology, love, definitive, desultory, conscientious, democracy, fascism, benevolence, and sentimentality).

    In your writing you are going to want to strike a balance between abstract and concrete description, and you will want to avoid judgmental description.

    In-class assignment:
    Here is an exercise to get us rolling.
    Below is a list of 15 words.

    I will put them on the board and in your notebooks say if it is a judgmental or non-judgmental term (evaluative or descriptive) and if the term is concrete or abstract. You should also say why you think so. We will go around the room and hear repsonses.

    monstrous
    delicate
    authoritative
    strong
    muscular
    automatic
    vibrant
    tedious
    pungent
    unrealistic
    flexible
    tart
    pleasing
    clever
    slow

    In-class free write and group work: the interview
    Free write: Take ten minutes and answer the following prompt:
    "Pick a place, either from memory or from your current experience that appeals to your senses, a place that makes you take notice of your surroundings. Describe this place in a way that will cause another person to experience it as you do. Avoid evaluative adjectives and descriptions. Write the piece without telling your readers your reaction to the place or your reasons for them. Offer instead the concrete details that shape your response to the place. You can include action and people other than yourself in your description if you like" (6).

    Don't think; write!
    There are next to no rules in free writing, just that it is important to keep your pen moving. Don't reread as you go. Don't cross things out. Just keep writing. To get to good writing, we first have to tolerate some chaos. In free-writing, especially if you engage in it frequently, you will often surprise yourself with the quality of your own thinking, with the ideas you did not really know you had and the many details you hadn't really noticed until you started writing.

    Interview:
    Hemingway, I believe, had it right about how to engage in conversation. He claimed:

    When people talk, listen completely. Don't be thinking about what you're going to say. Most people never listen. Nor do they observe. You should be able to go into a room and when you come out know everything that you saw there and not only that. If that room gave you any feeling, you should know exactly what it was that gave you the feeling. Try that for practice. When you are in town stand outside the theater and see how the people differ in the way they come out taxis and motor cars. There are a thousand ways to practice. (6)
    We will get to Hemingway's second suggestion later, for now we will address his first challenge. Pair off and interview one another about the place each of you selected for the free write. Speakers: Describe the place in a way that will cause your peer to experience it as you do. Avoid evaluative adjectives and descriptions of your feelings. Listeners: Take notes on how the speakers describe the place. Don't just notice what the people say. Notice body language and record things that helped you see the place through their eyes.

    Discuss Confidence people. Do tells really give us away?

    For the last part of the class, use your notes to review your peer's free write. Comment on particularly strong adjectives of descriptions and make notes to your peer on descriptors that did not really paint a clear picture.

    Journal Entry #1
    Weblog Entry:
    "Write a brief (two page) descriptive piece about yourself that you would be willing to read out loud to others engaged in the same exercise. Do this by offering a narrative of some revealing and representative 'moment'-perhaps a kind of moment that tended to recur-in your life. Sometimes the most telling moments, those that play a significant role in how we come to be who we are, are subtle, small moments, rather than 'big' life-changing experiences. Some of these small but significant moments are barely remembered until we start looking for them with writing. Thus, they engage readers in the writer's process of discovery, which is what good writing should do.
    Your piece will necessarily be a blend of showing and telling, of description and more explicit analysis, but make sure not to substitute telling readers how you felt for re-creating the experience that made you feel as you did. Offer your experience of a revealing moment to your readers. Avoid evaluative (empty of detail, judgmental) adjectives. Insofar as judgments are being made in your piece, let them be implied rather than overtly started..." (10).

    Private Journal Entry:
    Then produce an entry that blends empirical detail (showing) and analysis (your interpretation). Analyze moments in your weblog where you were not able to express fully what you wanted to say because of the non-judgmental restraint or where you felt liberated by the restraint to describe yourself more specifically. Again, diagnose rather than judge. Don't tell your imagined readers what you liked or disliked about what you could or could not say. Tell them instead what was interesting and revealing and why (31).

    Comma Exercises:
    View Comma Presentation (power point required):
    Conquering the Comma
    Do Exercise 1 and print out responses (be honest):
    Comma Exercise 1