Carlos Martinez
Summer 2005
Journal Entry #2: Due Thursday July 14

Weblog Entry:
         "Please choose someone you know or have just met and describe them to someone who does not know them (You may use last class' free write). Listen in on some conversations, writing down as much seemingly relevant detail (exact words and probably the physical actions that accompany them) as you can. Don't worry about order. Just keep recording what you see and hear and asking yourself what you notice. You will be able to shape the piece later in a way that you think best represents what you heard. After you have done the work of recording, say to yourself, "What did I learn? What was especially interesting, or revealing, or strange, about what I heard?" Respond to these questions with freewriting, preferably in more than one freewriting session. Then produce two pieces of revised (shaped and ordered) writing. One should be the show-versus-tell 'recording' of what you heard, the one that you hope will communicate by re-creating-without your explicitly telling-the effect that the talk had on you [your weblog entry]. The other [entry should go into your private journal and] should be a blend of empirical detail (showing) and analysis (your interpretation). Analyze rather than judge. Don't tell your readers what you liked or disliked. Tell them instead what was interesting and revealing and why" (31).

Comma Exercises:
Please do Exercise 2 and print out your answers.
Comma Exercise 2